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I decided I was going to be an author when I was three years old. Not even school age and I knew nearly as much about life as I do now. Granted, my exact words were “When I get big I’m gonna make books.”, which I’ve been told countless times as my mother’s eyes well up with tears for the sweet little baby I’ll never be again. In consolation for growing up, the ambitions of that sweet little baby live on in the still relatively sweet, but far from little sixteen year old I am today. I am a writer through in through, replete with the stereotypical neuroses and hang ups and the insatiable love of words. I read, I write, I think about what I’ve read, I think about what I’ve written, I think about what I will write, and I do little else.
My parents worry that I’ll never amount to anything because all I’m concerned with are words. I could write a biography on F. Scott Fitzgerald based entirely on previous knowledge but my math homework makes me queasy. I conceive dramatic back stories for all the families that visit my current place of work, The Holyoke Merry Go Round, but I can only rarely be bothered to get down to the sundry duties officially associated with the job. All of this concerns them hugely.
They think that wanting to write professionally is a nice idea, but that I should develop some kind of a back up. Their concerns are understandable. Nobody wants to put their child through college only to have them move home educated but unemployed after four years because they went after what they wanted, as opposed to what was practical. But practical has never been my style. I can’t live within the constraints of practicality. I won’t delve into the clichés of “marching to the beat of my own drum”, or “thinking outside the box”, but they do apply. I believe if everyone lived their lives exactly the way they wanted to, and chased the dreams that mattered to them, this world would be a lot better off. I love to write. I will never be able to make a living any other way happily, and if I can’t do something happily, I’d rather not do it at all.
I adore writing. I’ve been writing poems, short stories and even bits and pieces of potential novels for as long as I can remember. It’s the only career I’ve ever seriously considered. As the years passed and my youthful interests varied, passionate but fleeting, there have been a few other side projects, like marine biologist or first female president, but I’ve always come back to writing. Words are what make sense to me, what comfort me. Creative Writing is my best outlet for an overactive imagination, and I use it to the fullest. I admire good writing, and I endeavor to read as much of it as possible, not only for my enjoyment but for the improvement and development of my own writing. I want to use a gift, one which I humbly but truly believe I possess, to bring enjoyment and new thought to this world. It is when I am writing that I feel most alive, and most like my true self, and there is nothing else I can see myself doing with my life, or studying in college.
In life I am introverted and unassuming. In writing I can be anything. Boastful and bold or daring and courageous! The deepest caverns of my mind are explored through the words I put onto paper and I am endlessly surprised by the ideas that stem from the mind of a teenage girl to whom nothing particularly interesting has ever happened. My mind is on constant creative overload and the relentless flow of writing is its result. Descartes declared, “I think therefore I am”, but for me it is, always has been and always will be “I write, therefore I am.” Expressing myself through words has been such an integral part of my life that it has become a defining characteristic of my personality. I will always be a writer. I am daughter, sister, friend, and writer. Someday mother and wife may add themselves to that list but writer will never leave it.
My future is not tightly defined within carefully drawn constraints, but I rather like it this way. Without a goal set in stone there is plenty of room to grow and change. There are certain things which I know. I know that I wish to study Creative Writing. I know that I wish to improve my natural writing abilities. I know that I writing is the only career I want. Outside of that, much of my future profession is very vague, but that is of little trouble, however, because I truly believe that I will be a successful writer, in whichever medium. I truly believe that I will be able to achieve my dream. I truly believe that I won’t realize my parents’ fears. And I truly believe that with the passion I possess I will be an undoubted success in the life I chose those nearly fourteen years ago when I proudly announced, “When I get big I’m gonna make books”.

is this an good appeal essay?

this is a rough rough draft please let me know what you think of it.

To Whom it may concern,
Today I am writing this letter for your kind reconsideration for the admission to the University of Tampa. I respectfully felt there was a discrepancy in the decision made towards my admission. I am writing this appeal because of my great determination I have for my education and future. I believe everyone has to fight for their goals, dreams, and aspirations in life. In doing so, I am hoping to influence the appeal committee to reconsider my admission to the University of Tampa.
I would like to attend the University of Tampa for multiple reasons. UT is one of the elite southeast private schools in the United States. Therefore in the pursuit of excellence I strive for only the best in my education. I feel UT can provide me with the education I need to go out into the world and succeed at anything. Since UT offers great education 92% of UT undergraduates get accepted to graduate schools, which I am planning to apply after I achieve my bachelors degree in mathematics. In addition UT is home to 140 clubs and holds more that 2,000 community events each year that I want to be apart of. Being an out of state student I would love to experience the culture in Tampa. What better way to experience a new living environment in participating and interacting with my fellow students and community. This will not only make the best college experience but also a life changing experience as well.
As a student, I strive to get excellent grades and maintain them. I am proud to say that I have maintain a 3.1 GPA throughout high school and graduated in the top 10% of my class. Since I attended a newly built school there were so many “first time” projects and events to be had. I am delighted to say that not only did I help set-up but also participate in our first art fair. I helped with our art fair for the next two years raising money for art supplies, for students who need them. I believe that I can bring my passion for education and involvement to UT and make an excellent addition to the student body. I want to be given the honor to uphold the schools reputation for its education and involvement with the community.
As a student I maintain feasible grades however I feel I can go beyond a 3.1 GPA and maintain a 4.0 GPA. I also know that my SAT scores weren’t the best however ill peruse these as a challenge for improvement. While at UT I feel that I can improve my grades and get the necessary training to achieve my goal for improvement. In hopefully attending UT I would like to be the first in my family to attain a bachelors degree and move on to graduate school. This my goal I want to achieve and I feel UT is best suited for it.
Education is the key to success. I have accomplish so many goals yet I have more to achieve. I am hoping you will kindly reconsider my admission status. In doing so I will fully utilize the opportunity you have given me and will become a productive member of the student body. The University of Tampa is the right school for me, I hope you will give me the opportunity to explore a new education experience and a new chapter in my life as well.

Can come one grade me on my essay?

Jun Lu
Mr. Brown
English 11
26 October 2009
From What I Love
What is the one thing that impacted my life? That would certainly come to the answer of one of the beauties I love and enjoy – Piano. For many people, piano is just a musical instrument that they could use as a tool to perform and to entertain others. To me, it is more significant because it changed me from the inside to the outside, from how I think to how I act. It made me a better person in ways of processing problems, handling stress, and made me a happier person because I am more capable of coping with stress.
Throughout the years since I was a little kid, I heard about all the beautiful sounds and music that you can create with piano. Though I never had a chance to see one myself, I always paid special attention to the piano melodies in the music. During the summer of freshman year, I went to my friend’s house to do a project together; the first thing I saw when I walked into his house was the piano sitting right there by the wall next to dining table. As I approach the piano I was irresistibly reaching my hand out to touch it and lay my fingers on the different white bars that created diverting sounds. My friend was nice enough that he said he would teach me how to play some songs with it. From that day on, I was addicted to the elegancy of the piano, going to my friend’s house every day after school until the end of the summer learning how to play piano.
Since then I’ve always wanted a piano to be around in my house so I can play it whenever possible. Therefore, during sophomore year my dad surprised me with a keyboard for my birthday, I was thrilled. After I got my lovely keyboard, I went on the internet and try to learn something new to play on the piano every day after school. Before I received my keyboard as a gift, I always felt really bored and lonely after I get home from school because there was not anybody home because my parents are consistently working, and I felt that I have nothing to do other than to work on the homework. After I got my keyboard, it drastically changed the feeling that I had when I got home from a tiring day of school work. The keyboard provided me an escaping path from stress and also it keeps me company with good music. Many of my friends say that I am an aggressive to some extent and very impatient person. I quickly lose especially with activities such as fishing. It is fascinating even to me that I had so much patience with the piano where I just sat there learning and practicing repetitively on the same song to get good at it. Because I started to play piano, it changed me as a person that if I just give a little more patience to everything that I do, I would most likely enjoy it more.
I use piano as an escape route from stress. Whenever I feel sad and down, I would play music with my keyboard to abreact my feelings. Listening to the euphonic melody coming from the piano also calms me down from stressful situations, such as when I am stuck on a problem in homework and cannot figure it out or when I heard the news that my grandfather was tested positive for cancer and that I just can’t face the fact of it. Piano made me a better person in thinking wise because when I meet up with stress and confusion, I am able to calm myself down and think more thoroughly into the heart of the of the problem and different perception of the situation. Other than the problem handling improvements, I also changed in my habits that would help me succeed school and in the future. My addiction toward the elegancy of the piano, disciplined me to practice repetitively. Thus, it helped me developed the habit of practicing and reviewing the things I do not understand.
Ultimately, piano had changed me significantly from the inside to the outside in many ways that turned me into a better person. Because of piano I am capable of thinking more in-depth into the heart of the problems, and competent of coping with stress on a daily basis. As well as assisting me to develop a good habit of practicing and reviewing that would be a perfect tool to help me succeed in life.